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Post by jabble524 on Mar 30, 2009 2:18:12 GMT
Hello, my name is Jason, and I'm a huge fan of the beatles. These are lyrics for two songs I wrote for my band. If anyone has time, I would love feedback.
1) Kisses Indicate
I can leave the place where time stops Just outside reality I can leave the place where time stops Material paradise vanishes
Censored screams whispered They're spectacular with the vernacular of confusion Kisses indicate the illusion There's correlations between your lacerations
Watch the sunrise And fall asleep in your arms Coffee kisses at sunset And wake me from my dreams
Censored screams whispered They're spectacular with the vernacular of confusion Kisses indicate the illusion There's correlations between your lacerations
2) Dragon Fire Kisses
You re-hydrate my heart And give me a soul inside All I ever want is your love
I can look into your eyes And gaze into a mystical paradise All I ever want is your love
With lips like the smooth ocean current Pulling my loneliness out to sea With kisses like a dragon's fire Burning away all my depression
All I ever want is your love
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Post by mrmustard on Mar 30, 2009 11:21:51 GMT
Good set of lyrics. I would say they had shades of King Crimson rather than The Beatles which there is absolutely nothing wrong with. Do we get the chance to hear the music as well?
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Post by jabble524 on Apr 1, 2009 5:28:53 GMT
Thanks for the feedback. I truly appreciate it. Cheers, Jason
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Post by jabble524 on Oct 6, 2010 3:36:21 GMT
These are some more lyrics for my band.
Insomnia
Romance awakens the unconscious And in heartbreak it never sleeps An insomnia of revelations Shattered promises, we swore to keep
Paper tigers and Icarus wings Fly to the sun, when the siren sings Oedipus eyes to navigate the maze False bravado, caught in the minotaur’s gaze
Your Prometheus Kiss Stole the fire from my heart The eagle is my friend But you tear me apart
Luscious lips and Freudian slips Red herrings lead me into loving arms Denial is the architect of illusion On a night of cold truth
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